revise it to correct any pronoun shifts in person or number.
A person has a right to their own happiness, Simon thought. When he told this to his bosses Brenda and Nicole, though, we both laughed and told him to get back to work.
A person has a right to their own happiness, Simon thought. When he told this to his bosses Brenda and Nichole though, they both laughed and told him to get back to work.
